Level 5 draft improvement: from description to analysis

The situation

An HR advisor studying Level 5 alongside a full-time role sent us a near-complete draft. The writing was clear and the HR knowledge was sound, but on review the work was heavily descriptive. It explained concepts thoroughly but rarely analysed them or applied them to the organisation. At Level 5, that gap is a common cause of referral.

What we did

We reviewed the draft against each assessment criterion and produced a criteria-by-criteria feedback note. For every point marked 'descriptive', we suggested how to move it towards analysis, comparing options, weighing suitability and reaching a judgement, and where a workplace example would demonstrate application.

• Mapped the draft to every AC and flagged which were not yet fully met.
• Showed where description could become comparison and evaluation.
• Identified places to add a relevant workplace example.
• Checked Harvard referencing for consistency and completeness.

The outcome

With a clear action list, the advisor revised the draft themselves, adding analysis and application where it counted. The final submission addressed every criterion and read with the applied, evidence-based depth Level 5 expects.